Jun 6, 2012

Immortal!!!


They live in the hearts and will never grow old,
remembrance is the state which unfolds!
some evade jauntily and some may died,
the soul who’d protect, shall always live with pride!

They endanger their life to save from,
enemies who foment the riot and fray!
torn those invaders using arrow,
sword & gun and scoop them out far away!

They are fearless lion and fast alike snake,
And do not cheat the country of given rights!
They can cut their throat to make the country safe,
It’s all about passion, honor and pride!

       They versed thyself in the beauteous paradise,
will always be remember at evening  sunset and sunrise!
         Age shall not effete to hold their power,
        immortal they will remain in saving the world over!

With pride //Jasmeet


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This post is part of the contest Ten words to a Story(or Poem).. on WriteUpCafe.com





52 comments:

  1. Wow . Very aptly and wonderfully penned by a wonderful soul.

    Superb

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    1. Anupam : m grateful for your exclusive comment. Its so kind of you for always appreciating n motivating me with ur butiful lines.
      Keep sharing!

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  2. Great!
    Glad to have found you at the write up cafe!
    Cheers!! :)

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    1. Pooja : glad to see you here on my blog.

      Cheers girl :)

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  3. wow, truly amazing poem Jasmeet :) Loved the flow of the verse :)

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    1. hey thank u so much dear! even i liked ur poems too :)

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  4. Beautifully compiled.Truly exquisite :)

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    1. welcome in my little blogosphere Aditya :)
      Thanks for dropping by!
      keep reading n sharing ur views

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  5. Good One! Loved the compilation

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  6. salute ma'am .... a salute from me to all these immortals and to you too...

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    1. u make my day by saluting me junior :) hee hee neways thanks Malay

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  7. nice to c tat sum 1 frm mah clg is ving poetism in herself...great work

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    1. Hey Ankit ...ya all lines and post are truly written by me ..dnt be surprised but ya m surprised that m unable to recall u coz of ur coomon name Ankit.. remind me if u dnt mind :)

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    1. ha ha ha ha a unique comment Sharad ..m already grown up :P
      jokes apart thank u :)

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  9. Jasmeet wonderful poem! I love it to the core.. Best of luck for the contest..

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    1. Thank u so much for dropping by and please share ur Identity as i loved to call people by their names :-)

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    2. Good to know that.. This is Saravana Kumar Murugan..

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  10. WOW! Nice way to pay tribute to our Army men, Intense, loved the last line....

    "Age shall not effete to hold their power,
    immortal they will remain in saving the world over!"
    Keep Going, Great Stuff.

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  11. Very well worded and an apt dedication to our soldiers. All the best for the contest...:)

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    1. you know when i saw those 10 words to start with; i gave up that those words would not fit into my poetry then suddenly immortal word came into my mind and it took me 2 hours to complete my poem but i amazed that yeah i did it!

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  13. That was poetic brilliance. And what a fitting and soulful tribute! Beautifully written. Glad to have found your blog. :)

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    1. Warm welcome to u in my blogosphere :)
      thank u so much for sharing ur views here

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  14. This is great. Beautifully carved out threaded use of those words. I think they can make lyrics to a wonderful song.

    Following you. :D

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    1. Thanks a lot Leonardo :) Is this ur name or ur zodiac leo...share ur identity too..ur real name ...
      n Leo (zodiac) rock ! as i am one of them ;)

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  15. That is one brilliant take on the words for the contest.

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    1. Thanks a ton saru :) m learning from you

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  16. nice quotes...simple words to tell the true stories of the brave heroes who live their life only for their countrymen..us..

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  17. Captivating composition...beautiful :))

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    1. Thanku Panchaliji for always motivating me to come up with more thoughtful post

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  18. Satsriakal Jasmeet! :)
    Happy to see Punjabi Kudi rocking in blogging world!
    So beautiful poetry and how amazingly you used all the keywords so aptly !
    Amazing!
    Wish you all the best :)
    keep writing

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    1. Satshriakal Simran :)
      glad to have you here on my blog and a warm welcome to u!
      thanks for sharing ur views
      keep sharing and keep reading!!

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  19. wow...so very well written!!
    following you now.. check my blog too: http://theduskyindianbeauty.blogspot.in/

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    1. hey thanks a ton Ritu:) loved ur blog and following it too girl. kool makeup tutorials for a lazy lullaby like me :P

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  20. The best thing that i liked about this post is the way you have used all the words and yet created such a nice poem. Well done.

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  21. Wonderfully crafted poem! Superb! loved it!

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    1. @Rohan : Thank u so much for dropping by and for appreciating it :)

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