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Jun 6, 2012

Immortal!!!

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They live in the hearts and will never grow old,
remembrance is the state which unfolds!
some evade jauntily and some may died,
the soul who’d protect, shall always live with pride!

They endanger their life to save from,
enemies who foment the riot and fray!
torn those invaders using arrow,
sword & gun and scoop them out far away!

They are fearless lion and fast alike snake,
And do not cheat the country of given rights!
They can cut their throat to make the country safe,
It’s all about passion, honor and pride!

       They versed thyself in the beauteous paradise,
will always be remember at evening  sunset and sunrise!
         Age shall not effete to hold their power,
        immortal they will remain in saving the world over!

With pride //Jasmeet


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This post is part of the contest Ten words to a Story(or Poem).. on WriteUpCafe.com





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  1. Anupam PatraJune 6, 2012 at 7:22 PM

    Wow . Very aptly and wonderfully penned by a wonderful soul.

    Superb

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 7, 2012 at 5:51 AM

      Anupam : m grateful for your exclusive comment. Its so kind of you for always appreciating n motivating me with ur butiful lines.
      Keep sharing!

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  2. POOJAJune 6, 2012 at 9:14 PM

    Great!
    Glad to have found you at the write up cafe!
    Cheers!! :)

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 7, 2012 at 5:53 AM

      Pooja : glad to see you here on my blog.

      Cheers girl :)

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  3. NehaJune 6, 2012 at 11:25 PM

    wow, truly amazing poem Jasmeet :) Loved the flow of the verse :)

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 7, 2012 at 5:56 AM

      hey thank u so much dear! even i liked ur poems too :)

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  4. Aditya AgarwalJune 7, 2012 at 2:16 AM

    Beautifully compiled.Truly exquisite :)

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 7, 2012 at 5:59 AM

      welcome in my little blogosphere Aditya :)
      Thanks for dropping by!
      keep reading n sharing ur views

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  5. jaish_vatsJune 7, 2012 at 2:35 AM

    Good One! Loved the compilation

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  6. blogon malayJune 7, 2012 at 6:55 AM

    salute ma'am .... a salute from me to all these immortals and to you too...

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 7, 2012 at 11:27 AM

      u make my day by saluting me junior :) hee hee neways thanks Malay

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  7. ankitJune 7, 2012 at 6:57 AM

    nice lines...is it urs?

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  8. ankitJune 7, 2012 at 6:59 AM

    nice to c tat sum 1 frm mah clg is ving poetism in herself...great work

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 7, 2012 at 11:29 AM

      Hey Ankit ...ya all lines and post are truly written by me ..dnt be surprised but ya m surprised that m unable to recall u coz of ur coomon name Ankit.. remind me if u dnt mind :)

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  9. SharadJune 7, 2012 at 7:36 AM

    u r growing now.. :P

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 7, 2012 at 11:31 AM

      ha ha ha ha a unique comment Sharad ..m already grown up :P
      jokes apart thank u :)

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  10. Someone is SpecialJune 7, 2012 at 8:19 AM

    Jasmeet wonderful poem! I love it to the core.. Best of luck for the contest..

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 7, 2012 at 11:34 AM

      Thank u so much for dropping by and please share ur Identity as i loved to call people by their names :-)

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    2. Someone is SpecialJune 9, 2012 at 8:17 AM

      Good to know that.. This is Saravana Kumar Murugan..

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  11. PranshuJune 7, 2012 at 12:38 PM

    WOW! Nice way to pay tribute to our Army men, Intense, loved the last line....

    "Age shall not effete to hold their power,
    immortal they will remain in saving the world over!"
    Keep Going, Great Stuff.

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  12. UpasanaJune 7, 2012 at 8:08 PM

    Lovely words! Seamless flow! Brilliant!

    My world, my thoughts, my musings...

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  13. RAHUL MIGLANIJune 7, 2012 at 9:59 PM

    lovely ! deep !

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  14. PrashanthJune 7, 2012 at 10:51 PM

    Very well worded and an apt dedication to our soldiers. All the best for the contest...:)

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  15. Ankit ChughJune 8, 2012 at 12:43 AM

    You deserve the prize :)

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 8, 2012 at 6:15 AM

      you know when i saw those 10 words to start with; i gave up that those words would not fit into my poetry then suddenly immortal word came into my mind and it took me 2 hours to complete my poem but i amazed that yeah i did it!

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  16. Shilpa GandotraJune 8, 2012 at 10:12 AM

    Wow!!!!

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  17. RajJune 8, 2012 at 6:15 PM

    That was poetic brilliance. And what a fitting and soulful tribute! Beautifully written. Glad to have found your blog. :)

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 9, 2012 at 3:35 AM

      Warm welcome to u in my blogosphere :)
      thank u so much for sharing ur views here

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  18. LeonardoJune 9, 2012 at 8:35 AM

    This is great. Beautifully carved out threaded use of those words. I think they can make lyrics to a wonderful song.

    Following you. :D

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 9, 2012 at 8:56 AM

      Thanks a lot Leonardo :) Is this ur name or ur zodiac leo...share ur identity too..ur real name ...
      n Leo (zodiac) rock ! as i am one of them ;)

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  19. Saru SinghalJune 9, 2012 at 12:56 PM

    That is one brilliant take on the words for the contest.

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  20. SubhraJune 9, 2012 at 2:35 PM

    nice quotes...simple words to tell the true stories of the brave heroes who live their life only for their countrymen..us..

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  21. panchalibolchiJune 10, 2012 at 1:04 AM

    Captivating composition...beautiful :))

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 11, 2012 at 8:20 AM

      Thanku Panchaliji for always motivating me to come up with more thoughtful post

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  22. SimranJune 11, 2012 at 7:46 AM

    Satsriakal Jasmeet! :)
    Happy to see Punjabi Kudi rocking in blogging world!
    So beautiful poetry and how amazingly you used all the keywords so aptly !
    Amazing!
    Wish you all the best :)
    keep writing

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 11, 2012 at 8:21 AM

      Satshriakal Simran :)
      glad to have you here on my blog and a warm welcome to u!
      thanks for sharing ur views
      keep sharing and keep reading!!

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  23. RituJune 12, 2012 at 3:25 AM

    wow...so very well written!!
    following you now.. check my blog too: http://theduskyindianbeauty.blogspot.in/

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 12, 2012 at 7:36 AM

      hey thanks a ton Ritu:) loved ur blog and following it too girl. kool makeup tutorials for a lazy lullaby like me :P

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  24. JJJune 18, 2012 at 9:43 AM

    The best thing that i liked about this post is the way you have used all the words and yet created such a nice poem. Well done.

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  25. AnonymousJune 22, 2012 at 3:06 AM

    Wonderfully crafted poem! Superb! loved it!

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    1. Jasmeet KukrejaJune 22, 2012 at 10:48 AM

      @Rohan : Thank u so much for dropping by and for appreciating it :)

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  26. SreejaJune 26, 2012 at 1:39 AM

    Admired this one...

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